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Zane Paxton's avatar

I’m not even sure what is hitting me but it is. This poem is really strong.

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Mark Rico's avatar

Thanks, Zane – I'd love to hear about it if you figure out what got you!

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Tania Runyan's avatar

Love your use of form here!

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Mark Rico's avatar

Thank you, Tania! It feels a bit Welsh to me, though I'm not aware of any that follow the form I was experimenting with here.

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Tania Runyan's avatar

I’ve written a couple in that same mirrored rhymed style before. I’ll see if I can dig them up! It works so well for a concentrated punch of a poem like yours.

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Mark Rico's avatar

I'd love to see your efforts there! I think there's a lot of similarity in our styles, despite the frequent divergence in voice.

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Tania Runyan's avatar

You are correct! You're the one who inspired me to write the golden shovels, right?

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Mark Rico's avatar

Possibly! I wrote one back in November, so if that's about when you got that push, it might have been from that poem...

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Ann Collins's avatar

an easing

that keeps you confined,

birth within the caul . . .

beautiful image

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Mark Rico's avatar

Thank you, Ann!

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