You've nailed the vibe, Kilby. Our family just finished Job a week ago and it must have been bouncing around in my mind. Interesting to set out to write a poem without harmonic intent, and having it happen anyways. Thank you for reading and commenting!
Thank you for reading and commenting, Margaret Ann! I know what it's like to not have a lot of words after using so many as a parent and trying to write my own poetry with whatever resources I have left. I'm grateful that you spent some time here.
Thank you so much for your kind words, X. P. I'm curious ... may I ask what stood out about this one to you? I have to confess that I often don't respond to my own work in the same kind of way that readers seem to. No worries if you don't have time to answer. I understand you're a busy person.
Consistently strong figures of speech in the first stanza (though my ear wants "longer-abiding" in line 5), together with arresting, cogent thoughts, all in the space of a beautifully crafted sonnet whose rhyme scheme is subtle enough to go undetected for a few lines, after which it can be enjoyed, not just admired. Well done.
There is so much here, Mark, and so deftly pieced together. I’m reading Job right now, and this is a perfect match. Your poems are always rewarding.
You've nailed the vibe, Kilby. Our family just finished Job a week ago and it must have been bouncing around in my mind. Interesting to set out to write a poem without harmonic intent, and having it happen anyways. Thank you for reading and commenting!
Gorgeous (so much more than that, but I'm out of words at the moment).
Thank you for reading and commenting, Margaret Ann! I know what it's like to not have a lot of words after using so many as a parent and trying to write my own poetry with whatever resources I have left. I'm grateful that you spent some time here.
Amen.
Thank you for reading and commenting, Sierra!
This poem sends a profound message, and that is:
* Those who through great suffering and humility learn to put their faith and unquestioned trust in God and Her wisdom will not be abandoned.
Thank you for reading and commenting, Maureen!
Leaps and bounds here, Mark. Leaps and bounds.
Thank you so much for your kind words, X. P. I'm curious ... may I ask what stood out about this one to you? I have to confess that I often don't respond to my own work in the same kind of way that readers seem to. No worries if you don't have time to answer. I understand you're a busy person.
Consistently strong figures of speech in the first stanza (though my ear wants "longer-abiding" in line 5), together with arresting, cogent thoughts, all in the space of a beautifully crafted sonnet whose rhyme scheme is subtle enough to go undetected for a few lines, after which it can be enjoyed, not just admired. Well done.
Thank you for explaining – I'm grateful! I'll have to mark down line 5 as one to consider when editing later on.
Or maybe it’s not my ear wanting that in line 5. Anyway, you have to trust your own ear.
A timely read for me this morning. Thank you, Mark. Shine, Lord.
Thank you for reading, Randy! I'm glad there was something here for you.