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Joyce McP's avatar

You captured this moment beautifully!

Mark Rico's avatar

Thank you, Joyce!

James's avatar

The sun being "denied the sight of his own work: summer's smothered sigh" is a brilliantly succinct and evocative way to sum up this climate. Great stuff :)

Mark Rico's avatar

Many thanks, James! I appreciate your feedback.

Melanie Bettinelli's avatar

Perfect evocation of a particular kind of humid summer day.

Mark Rico's avatar

Thank you, Melanie!

Silent Hours's avatar

It's so vivid that, whilst sitting in a refrigerated room, I'm suffocating. (That's a compliment, I promise)

Mark Rico's avatar

Thank you! That's high praise indeed. Maybe my next poem should provide refreshment whilst you're sitting in a hot car. :)

Silent Hours's avatar

Deal! Though I wouldn't be surprised if you managed it; you've already mastered poetic asphyxiation. :)

Abram Newcomer's avatar

A rare poem in that I understood most of it on the first read (usually takes me at least two). A simple enough scene, yet not portrayed in simplistic language, but in evocative images. Elegant and well done!

Mark Rico's avatar

Thank you for reading and for your feedback, Abram! I'm glad the poem landed without being too complicated.

Portia's avatar

So good!

Mark Rico's avatar

Thank you, Portia!